That's a bit of a disappointing ending honestly. Could've been way more possessions and on a personal note I don't find the woman used for the captions particularly attractive. Then again I'm not a fan of obvious porn pictures being used for captions.
I love the irony at the new Darren's thoughts, and I love how comfortable Darren has become as Mrs. Ginther... very dreamy! (Seeing a variation on this were the younger male who has become a mature woman, but doesn't lose as much sense of self would be nice, but still appreciates the comforts of her new body, along with an awareness of her male past would be nice.) - Rachel
I have an suggestion if your up for it. A worring husband whose to busy for his wife thinks that she is cheating on him. So in order to find out he possesses his female neighbor who is a close friend of the wife. When he visit his wife as the nwighbor and confronts her, it turns out th person who shes cheating with IS the neighbor. You decides what happens from there ;)
Nice story !
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ReplyDeleteThat's a bit of a disappointing ending honestly. Could've been way more possessions and on a personal note I don't find the woman used for the captions particularly attractive. Then again I'm not a fan of obvious porn pictures being used for captions.
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ReplyDeleteI love the irony at the new Darren's thoughts, and I love how comfortable Darren has become as Mrs. Ginther... very dreamy! (Seeing a variation on this were the younger male who has become a mature woman, but doesn't lose as much sense of self would be nice, but still appreciates the comforts of her new body, along with an awareness of her male past would be nice.)
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Also, who is the model?
DeleteUsually love your stories but I have to be honest... Did not like this one at all
ReplyDeleteI have an suggestion if your up for it. A worring husband whose to busy for his wife thinks that she is cheating on him. So in order to find out he possesses his female neighbor who is a close friend of the wife. When he visit his wife as the nwighbor and confronts her, it turns out th person who shes cheating with IS the neighbor. You decides what happens from there ;)
ReplyDeleteI absolutely live your captions! I wank to them every night! keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteThe ending is perfect, and wonderfully ironic.
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