Friday, September 12, 2014

Time for a Change

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7 comments:

  1. Loved it, great use of the pictures!

    I'm really enjoying the recent increase in F2F captions.

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    1. I'm happy that you are! I feel bad about not doing them everyday.

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    2. Well you are my favourite caption writer.

      I wonder what I'll be if I was white... Maybe I could have my body swapped with another follower.

      Alexis

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  2. Yes! A race swao was long overdue, and yes, please, keep increasing the F2Fs. You said yourself a long time ago that you didn't like having so much more TG than F2Fs.

    Also, another friendly suggestion: you might want to lessen the amount of hyperbole in your writtings, which has been increasing greatly lately. You have great stories, but with an hypoerbole every two phrases, they sound a lot more amateurish than they should.

    This is completely constructive criticism. Your blog is still the best there is.

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    1. Oh thanks for this. Easy to go down a rabbit hole without people keeping you in check. Would you mind elaborating on what you mean by hyperbole?

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    2. Hyperbole is exaggeratting a description when you write. When it's used too much, it undermines the subtlety of the text.

      Take a phrase like this: "...she saw the kind of tan beauty ALL the guys at her school were ALWAYS raving over". That's two hyperboles in one sentence.

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    3. Right, that makes sense. Redundancies take away from the intensity. I'll try and look for that in future.

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